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Cours gratuits > Forum > Forum anglais: Questions sur l'anglais || En basMessage de yoleader posté le 30-01-2015 à 16:15:55 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
Après avoir faire plusieurs exercices, je me suis dit: "Et si j'essayais d'écrire quelque chose, cela ne peut que m'aider".
J'ai tenté d'écrire un peu ce que je fais de mes journées pour l'instant.
Merci aux personnes qui prendront le temps de me lire et de me corriger.
PS: Je suis loin d'être une "bête" en anglais^^
My name is Yoan and I live in Istres since one year. Before I lived in Poitiers for two years and I got a studio. I have twenty four years. I passed my exam six month ago and actually, I’m looking for a job in maritime transport. I am a smoker and I can’t stand vegetables.I like wake board and look at movie, series, play video games.
I passed several interviews but the answers was always negative so I search to improve me in English. My main difficulty is the grammar like French. Is it linked?
Every day I wake up at eight o’clock and I get up at ten past eight. I went to bathroom for brush my teeth and I dressed me with a trousers and t-shirt and I went to my balcony for smoked. Next, I took my breakfast then I drank my coffee.
Often, as soon I put my ass (sans être vulgaire) on my armchair, my dogs jumped on me ^^. My dogs are so cute! I was watching TV when my niece brought me her book. She has a purple skirt and I don’t knew. I found she is taller than other little girls. She lives in Toulon.
Each day, I do some housework. This morning I vacuumed the floor and I emptied the dishwasher.
Thank you for your time

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Modifié par lucile83 le 30-01-2015 19:24
Réponse: Aide /essai de razzor, postée le 30-01-2015 à 17:54:26 (S | E)
Bonsoir
My name is Yoan and I live









I passed several interviews but the answers was



Every day I wake up at eight o’clock and I get up at ten past eight. I went








Often, as soon I put my ass



Each day, I do some housework. This morning I vacuumed the floor and I emptied the dishwasher.
C'est bien.
Vous commencez par parler au présent et puis vous changez au passé.A corriger.
Bon courage

Réponse: Aide /essai de yoleader, postée le 30-01-2015 à 19:26:54 (S | E)
Thanks
My name is Yoan and I lived in Istres for one years (If I remove “for one years”, can I use the present?). Before I lived in Poitiers for two years and I got a studio. I am twenty four years old. I passed my exam six months ago and actually, I’m looking for a job in maritime transport. I am a smoker and I can’t stand vegetables. I like wakeboard (the sport) and watch movies, series and play video games.
I passed several interviews but the answers were always negative so I searched to improve my English. My main difficulty is the grammar like French. Is it linked?
Everyday I wake up at eight o’clock and I get up at ten past eight. I go to the bathroom for brush my teeth and I put on trousers and t-shirt and I went at my balcony to do smoke ( not sur). Next, I take my breakfast then I drink my coffee.
Often, as soon I sat down on my armchair, my dogs jumped on me. My dogs are so cute! I was watching TV when my niece brought me her book. She has a purple skirt and I didn’t know. I found she is taller than other little girls. She lives in Toulon.
Each day, I do some housework. This morning I vacuumed the floor and I emptied the dishwasher.
I hope I will revise my mistakes.
Réponse: Aide /essai de razzor, postée le 30-01-2015 à 20:55:13 (S | E)
My name is Yoan and I lived






I passed several interviews but the answers were always negative so I searched to improve my English. My main difficulty is the grammar like French. Is it linked?
Everyday





Often, as soon



Each day, I do some housework. This morning I vacuumed the floor and I emptied the dishwasher.
It's better but there are still quite a few mistakes. If you correct everything, it should be all right!
Réponse: Aide /essai de yoleader, postée le 30-01-2015 à 23:51:09 (S | E)
My name is Yoan and I have lived in Istres for one year. Before I lived in Poitiers for two years and I got a studio. I am twenty four years old. I passed my exam six months ago and currently, I’m looking for a job in maritime transport. I am a smoker and I can’t stand vegetables. I like wakeboarding (the sport) and watching movies, series and playing video games.
I passed several interviews but the answers were always negative so I searched to improve my English. My main difficulty is the grammar like French. Is it linked?
Every day I wake up at eight o’clock and I get up at ten past eight. I go to the bathroom to brush my teeth and I put on trousers and my t-shirt and I went on (logical) my balcony to smoke. Next, I take my breakfast then I drink my coffee.
Often, as soon as I sit down on my armchair, my dogs jump on me. My dogs are so cute! I was watching TV when my niece brought me her book. She has a purple skirt and I didn’t know. I found she is taller than other little girls. She lives in Toulon.
Each day, I do some housework. This morning I vacuumed the floor and I emptied the dishwasher.
This allows me to see my mistakes.
Thank you

PS: I hope this time it's good ^^
Réponse: Aide /essai de razzor, postée le 31-01-2015 à 00:32:55 (S | E)
Hello again,
I couldn't find any mistakes this time. Well done!

Réponse: Aide /essai de here4u, postée le 31-01-2015 à 09:39:01 (S | E)
Hello
"Every day I wake up at eight o’clock and I get up at ten past eight. I go to the bathroom to brush my teeth and I put on trousers and my t-shirt and I went on (logical) my balcony to smoke. Next, I take my breakfast then I drink my coffee."
Why are you changing tenses abruptly to have a cigarette ? So many present tenses, and then that preterite, and back to the present ??
Similar surprising changes of tenses when you speak about your dog .... and niece !
Réponse: Aide /essai de yoleader, postée le 31-01-2015 à 14:02:11 (S | E)
thank you!

I followed the corrections and yesterday I got lost .
xxxxxx
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Modifié par lucile83 le 31-01-2015 15:45
Réponse: Aide /essai de lucile83, postée le 31-01-2015 à 15:48:08 (S | E)
Hello,
You have to think about your mistakes and correct them on your own. We won't do the job for you

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