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Message de here4u posté le 25-11-2022 à 09:02:37 (S | E | F)
Hello, dear workers!

Here is the new topic for you to write about... I hope many of you will participate freely and enthusiatically...

You mustn't be afraid of making mistakes... We LOVE mistakes, because they give us an opportunity to explain and correct!

Here is today's topic:

"Have you ever been "ashamed of yourself" in a public place? How did you react?" (No confession is required... You may invent the situation and change a real one to fit your purpose...)

Voici le rappel des modalités de la première partie de l'exercice :
1. Je vous demande une EXPRESSION sur le sujet proposé à m’envoyer en mp dès que possible …
2. Le plus tôt possible, cette première expression sera publiée sur le Forum, et CHACUN sera libre de « corriger » UNE FOIS ( en collant le texte et indiquant les erreurs EN BLEU, et en soulignant ce qui vous semble maladroit et que vous voudriez changer, sans donner la « correction » (forme correcte), à ce moment là, comme il se doit.) Si un autre membre a déjà indiqué des erreurs en bleu, VOUS DEVEZ repartir de cette correction et la confirmer ou la corriger... Un seul devoir à la fois sera publié pour corriger … Vous pourrez ensuite donner vos suggestions de correction (en vert!)

IMPORTANT! Pour me faciliter le transfert de vos travaux sur le site, pourriez vous m'indiquer par un "(" la correction souhaitée, s'il vous plaît ?
ie. (I'm repeating for years... ou (was not only to want something,... . Pourquoi ? Simplement parce que le site ne "garde" pas les indications de couleurs ou de soulignement etc. dès que l'on copie ... Donc, je prends vos travaux, je les corrige avec les codes "bleu" ou "souligné" ou "vert", mais au moment où je vous poste la correction, je perds tout mon travail ... et dois tout refaire mot à mot avec deux fenêtres ou même deux écrans pour un travail fastidieux de copie point par point ... Merci de votre aide !

Les modalités complètes sont accessibles sur le lien suivant : Lien internet


( Je vous les rappellerai au fur et à mesure de la progression du travail )
Cet exercice sera ... ce que vous en ferez : ou ou Do your best, I trust You!
Correction en ligne le jeudi 8 décembre 2022.
J'attends vos envois en mp et publierai le premier dès que possible.
MAY THE FORCE BE WITH YOU and with US!




Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 26-11-2022 à 14:49:56 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

Here is the first contribution to Let's Suggest 27. to the writer and help required to check it! (mistakes in blue and what is clumsy should be underlined!)

EXPRESSION N°1:

I was about nineteen and meeting some friends in Paris. I was wearing one of my best outfits, very fashionable in the sixties: a wide skirt and a pettycoat.
As I was walking over the subway ventilation grilles, a blast of air lifted my blue skirt, revealing the top of my thighs and my underwear!
Red with shame, motionless and embarrassed, I tried to pull my skirt down, without thinking of moving. Alas, my attemps were unsuccessful!
Some workers, standing on scaffolding on the other side of the street started laughing, and one of them clapped. I would have sent them
to hell.
On the pavement, a sympathetic passer-by shouted to me: "Go along! but go along!" and I did so.
I ran away without any thanks for the advice, nor any glance for the the spectators.
It's been a long time, but even now, I never walk over a ventilation grille when I wear a skirt!

for any necessary help (or remarks! )



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de maxwell, postée le 26-11-2022 à 15:01:16 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

EXPRESSION 1 : (mistakes in blue and what is clumsy should be underlined!)

I was about nineteen and meeting some friends in Paris. I was wearing one of my best outfits, very fashionable in the sixties: a wide skirt and a (pettycoat.
As I was walking over the subway ventilation grilles, a blast of air lifted my blue skirt, revealing the top of my thighs and my underwear!
Red with shame, motionless and embarrassed, I tried to pull my skirt down, without thinking of moving. Alas, my attemps were unsuccessful!
Some workers, standing on scaffolding on the other side of the street started laughing, and one of them clapped. I would have sent them to hell.
On the pavement, a sympathetic passer-by shouted to me: "Go along! but go along!" and I did so.
I ran away without any thanks for the advice, nor any glance for the (the spectators.
It's been a long time, but even now, I never walk over a ventilation grille when I wear a skirt!

(J'aurai quand même une question car il y a un point qui ne me paraît pas clair)



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de amalia80, postée le 26-11-2022 à 15:55:00 (S | E)
Hello Maxwell!
je peux peut-être répondre à ta question.



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de maxwell, postée le 27-11-2022 à 07:53:35 (S | E)
Hello Amalia
C'est juste un tout petit détail... Voici ma question : j'espère qu'elle ne t'embarrassera pas (vu ma question, j'aurais préféré parlé indirectement et anonymement à l'"auteur du texte" )
Je n'y connais rien aux vêtements féminins mais si j'ai bien compris, tu portais un jupon ET une jupe.
Or, tu dis que la grille d'aération a soulevé la jupe et qu'elle a dévoilé les sous-vêtements.
De deux choses l'une : soit tu inclus le jupon dans les sous-vêtements, soit il aurait fallu préciser que le jupon aussi était soulevé.
(ou alors j'ai fait un faux-sens sur petticoat)



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de amalia80, postée le 27-11-2022 à 09:26:39 (S | E)
Hello Maxwell!
Aucun problème! Oui, le jupon est un sous vêtement féminin,qui ne se porte plus beaucoup maintenant et qui était à la mode dans les années 60 pour soutenir l'ampleur des jupes.L'air a donc soulevé la jupe et le jupon...(la suite est dans mon texte).
Bon dimanche ,et à bientôt sur le site



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 27-11-2022 à 14:24:31 (S | E)


... et si le jupon dépassait, c'était déjà scandaleux ...

Green allowed tonight after 8.



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de maxwell, postée le 27-11-2022 à 21:33:38 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

EXPRESSION 1 : suggestions

I was about nineteen and meeting some friends in Paris. I was wearing one of my best outfits, very fashionable in the sixties: a wide skirt and a (petticoat.
As I was walking over the subway ventilation grilles, a blast of air lifted my blue skirt (and my petticoat (1), revealing the top of my thighs and my underwear!
Red with shame, motionless and embarrassed, I tried to pull my skirt down, without thinking of moving. Alas! my (attempts were unsuccessful!
Some workers, standing on scaffolding on the other side of the street, started laughing, and one of them clapped. I would have sent them to hell.
On the pavement, a sympathetic passer-by shouted to me: "(Get going! Come on! (2)" and I did so.
I ran away without any thanks for the advice, nor any glance for (the spectators.
It's been a long time but even now, I never walk over a ventilation grille when I wear a skirt!

(1) Je rajoute cet élément qui me semble important pour l'histoire car je trouve que le fait que le jupon soit relevé est beaucoup plus embarrassant que s'il ne l'était pas. (Et je suis sûr d'être fidèle à l'auteur)
(2) Je me trompe peut-être mais je verrais plutôt des exclamations comme : Go ahead! Get going! Move on!



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de amalia80, postée le 28-11-2022 à 07:17:59 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION 1 : suggestions

I was about nineteen and meeting some friends in Paris. I was wearing one of my best outfits, very fashionable in the sixties: a wide skirt and a (petticoat
As I was walking over the subway ventilation grilles, a blast of air lifted my blue skirt (and its petticoat, revealing the top of my thighs and my underwear!
Red with shame, motionless and embarrassed, I tried to pull my skirt down, without thinking of moving. Alas! my (attempts were unsuccessful!
Some workers, standing on scaffolding on the other side of the street, started laughing, and one of them clapped. I would have sent them to hell.
On the pavement, a sympathetic passer-by shouted to me: "x(Get going! Come on!" and I did so.
I ran away without any thanks for the advice, nor any glance for the spectators.
It's been a long time but even now, I never walk over a ventilation grille when I wear a skirt!


J'ai repris les suggestions de Maxwell ,employé its à la place de the( petticoat) car , en fait , le jupon était attaché à la jupe.
X je voulais dire;"avancez, mais avancez donc! est- ce que" Move along!but move along!" conviendrait aussi?



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 29-11-2022 à 08:43:23 (S | E)
Hello, dears!

EXPRESSION N°2 has come!

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front two hundred people.
It was at a new product presentation of cocktail party.
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD suit.
A shame for me!
You can't guess what I did?...
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet and I started to clean the jacket bottom.
You know what part of the body the bottom of a mans'jacket is on!...
As well as, the Boss said -" Stop it" beautiful dyer" fortunately, laughing.
Even now, I wonder how I could have done that?...

Please, help us correct indicating possible mistakes and underlining what looks clumsy!



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de maxwell, postée le 29-11-2022 à 20:48:19 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION N°2: mistakes and clumsinesses:

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front (XXX two hundred people.
It was at a (new product presentation of cocktail party.
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD(XXX suit.
A shame for me!
(You can't guess what I did?...
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet and I started to clean the (jacket bottom.
You know what part of the body the bottom of a (mans'jacket is on!...
(As well as (je n'ai pas compris ce choix de mot de liaison), the Boss said -" Stop it" beautiful dyer" fortunately, laughing.
Even now, I wonder how I could have done that?...


Thanks for the story!



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de amalia80, postée le 30-11-2022 à 08:41:31 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION N°2: mistakes and clumsinesses:

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front (x two hundred people.
It was at a (new product presentation of cocktail party
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD(xX suit.
A shame for me!
You can't guess what I did?...
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet and I started to clean the ( jacket bottom
You know what part of the body the bottom of a (mans'jacket is on!...
(As well as, , the Boss said -" Stop it" beautiful dyer" fortunately, laughing.
Even now, I wonder how I could have done that?...



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de magie8, postée le 02-12-2022 à 11:29:34 (S | E)
Hello! je pense que c est le moment de mettre en vert
EXPRESSION N°2: suggestion

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front "(of two hundred people.
It was at a "(cocktail party for the presentation of a new product.
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD"('s suit.
A shame for me!
You can't guess what I did?...
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet and I started to clean the "( bottom of the jacket
You know what part of the body the bottom of a "(jacket for men is on!...
"(So that the Boss said -" Stop it, beautiful dyer" fortunately, laughing.
Even now, I wonder how I could have done that?...



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de amalia80, postée le 02-12-2022 à 12:15:28 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION N°2: suggestions

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front (of two hundred people.
It was at a ( a cocktail party to present a new prduct
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD( 's suit.
A shame for me!
You can't guess what I did?...
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet and I started to clean the (bottom of the jacket
You know what part of the body the bottom of a ( man's jacket is on!...
( Fortunately , the Boss said -" Stop it" beautiful dyer" fortunately, laughing.
Even now, I wonder how I could have done that?..



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de maxwell, postée le 02-12-2022 à 20:10:48 (S | E)
Hello!
EXPRESSION N°2: suggestions:

Oh! Yes, I have been ashamed of myself, moreover in front (of two hundred people.
It was at a (cocktail party for the presentation of a new product.
I was standing by the buffet, with a drink in one hand and a small cake in the other (one, when the Managing Director approached me to ask my opinion about the new product, as my retail store was the biggest in France.
I started to talk to him gesturing with my hands, forgetting my glass which spilled on the MD('s suit.
A shame for me!
(Can you guess what I did?...(1)
My first instinct was to take a cloth napkin from the buffet: I started to clean the (bottom of his jacket...
You know (which part of the body the bottom of a (men's jacket is on(, don't you?...
(That's why the Boss said: "Stop it, beautiful dyer" fortunately laughing.
Even now, I (still wonder how I could have done that(...(2)

(1) Le point d'interrogation avec une phrase affirmative m'a un peu perturbé. J'ai 2 propositions :
Can you guess what I did?
You can't guess what I did, can you?
(2) je n'aurais pas mis de point d'interrogation ici

J'attendais sagement le feu vert pour les suggestions...



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 03-12-2022 à 00:43:22 (S | E)
Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 02-12-2022 à 14:34:52 (S | E)
Hello dears!

No, I haven't forgotten the thread and I'm happy to see that you can handle it on your own!

I'm back home and "free" now... and couldn't wait to post a new EXPRESSION. (another one is in the waiting list! )

EXPRESSION N°3: PLEASE HELP! indicate possible mistakes in blue and underline what's clumsy.

One evening, as I was walking home, I saw a group of men, standing -or sitting, I don't remember- in the parking lot of a supermarket.
I didn't look at them but as I was approaching -since they were on my way- I could hear one of them say: "Boy, you're dressed like a scarecrow!"
I blushed with embarrassment...Having said that, I didn't understand why he was saying that: I was wearing a paramecium long sleeve shirt, with a matching tie. I admit this way of dressing was very uncommon and vintage but I really liked it.
I pretended I didn't hear anything and I walked a little faster without ever looking at them: I imagined that he was looking for confrontation and might become violent. I didn't feel safe...

It was the first time I had worn this shirt and this tie... and the last one! 152 words

"blue" till tomorrow night and green on Sunday morning. Thanks for your help!

Edit: Puisque vous voulez continuer le 2 (ce qui est TB ), c'est la deuxième fois (seconde?) que je recule l'EXPRESSION 3



Réponse : Let's suggest/ 27 de here4u, postée le 03-12-2022 à 22:11:43 (S | E)
Hello!

"J'attendais sagement le feu vert pour les suggestions..." Too cute! We used to have a "gentlemen's [or gentle people's] agreement to work in blue for two days and then go green... except if I have too many EXPRESSIONS in the waiting list to be able to respect this rhythm and the deadline. (, which is the case this time...)
for your very good work.

Attention, pour l'EXPRESSION 3, as I wrote above, it will be: "blue" till tomorrow night [which is tonight] and green on Sunday morning. A partir de demain matin, vous pourrez, si vous n'avez pas eu assez de temps, poster les deux versions (bleue puis verte - vous pouvez même éditer quand nécessaire pour rajouter le vert ...) à la suite, sans attendre ... (Sinon EXPRESSION N°4 n'aurait pas assez de temps de correction.)

à vous ...




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